Talk:A New Day (Survive)/@comment-24285195-20190905173749

It sounds like you're very unsure how to write this story, you shouldn't really need to keep the "if they leave at night" or (determinant) parts if it's not going to be turned into a game. Also the dialogue is irrelevant unless needed to direct the plot in a specific direction, or you're writing out the entire dialogue.

Oh and you completely forget Justin or Danny exist. A lot of scenarios in this episode could've done with their help like the Shawn situation. Depending on who you have alive from the bus, they could potentially add to the story in interesting ways, like Danny was arrested for messing with kids, him being alone with Clem would be very bad. Also why was Lee limping? and did Larry get his pills?