Thread:EasternSky/@comment-24596982-20180107040816/@comment-24596982-20180107044418

EasternSky wrote: KeepOnKeepingOn wrote:

EasternSky wrote: You'll enjoy this one: http://thewalkingdeadfanon.wikia.com/wiki/Break_Out_(OMD) Hope I didn't butcher Matthew. Just read it. He’s spot on. How do you feel about him having a brother? Or Matt coming back? I don’t mind it.

Though if I may offer some constructive criticism... the writing is very scripted and bleak. More like a skeleton. Your stories are formatted as if they were a script for a play or a show. Thus making them feel like they need to be fleshed out. The characters lack proper emotion and actions are rushed.

This isn’t me saying the story is bad. You’ve got potential and you have the framework of a very good story. But the writing does need a lot of work to become more like a story and less like a script. You’ll need to elaborate more and make the characters... feel like characters, instead of just names on the screen.