Talk:One Short Day (DD)/@comment-31244753-20191029123338

first interesting chapter, we have an interesting scene start and a main character develloper. The passage in italics is very well used however the development on the first chapter of the other protagonist was a little subscint and I had very little that I am really interested. I had a hard time understanding how much time passed between the accident and the isolation off the devellopment of the main character plays on top of it and this fuzzy side made me go out of the story a bit.